Scan barcode
A review by jeaniinabottle
Talk British to Me by Robin Bielman
3.0
The premise of this story was great.
Mateo was a lot of fun.
Teague was so nauseatingly perfect it made me want to roll my eyes. I get wanting to have a likable lead, and Teague was likable, but she was also completely flawless. Crazy good at math AND writing AND all sports AND secure enough in herself to take an emotional beating from her boss while working two jobs and being in school AND she’s super in shape despite being crazy busy AND she befriends doormen and nervous brides AND she can do any job you put in front of her AND she’s head-turningly beautiful AND apparently great at sex despite limited experience AND are you starting to see the problem yet?
The worst you can say about her is that she’s a little clumsy when Mateo comes around (though he often bumps into her so even then it’s not entirely her clumsiness), and that’s mostly to facilitate the plot.
I think if you must write a Mary Sue lead, you should at least leave out some of the things she’s great at so that you can still keep her relatable rather than so obviously wish fulfillment that it starts to become alienating to your readers. Because honestly? She kind of was.
Merged review:
The premise of this story was great.
Mateo was a lot of fun.
Teague was so nauseatingly perfect it made me want to roll my eyes. I get wanting to have a likable lead, and Teague was likable, but she was also completely flawless. Crazy good at math AND writing AND all sports AND secure enough in herself to take an emotional beating from her boss while working two jobs and being in school AND she’s super in shape despite being crazy busy AND she befriends doormen and nervous brides AND she can do any job you put in front of her AND she’s head-turningly beautiful AND apparently great at sex despite limited experience AND are you starting to see the problem yet?
The worst you can say about her is that she’s a little clumsy when Mateo comes around (though he often bumps into her so even then it’s not entirely her clumsiness), and that’s mostly to facilitate the plot.
I think if you must write a Mary Sue lead, you should at least leave out some of the things she’s great at so that you can still keep her relatable rather than so obviously wish fulfillment that it starts to become alienating to your readers. Because honestly? She kind of was.
Mateo was a lot of fun.
Teague was so nauseatingly perfect it made me want to roll my eyes. I get wanting to have a likable lead, and Teague was likable, but she was also completely flawless. Crazy good at math AND writing AND all sports AND secure enough in herself to take an emotional beating from her boss while working two jobs and being in school AND she’s super in shape despite being crazy busy AND she befriends doormen and nervous brides AND she can do any job you put in front of her AND she’s head-turningly beautiful AND apparently great at sex despite limited experience AND are you starting to see the problem yet?
The worst you can say about her is that she’s a little clumsy when Mateo comes around (though he often bumps into her so even then it’s not entirely her clumsiness), and that’s mostly to facilitate the plot.
I think if you must write a Mary Sue lead, you should at least leave out some of the things she’s great at so that you can still keep her relatable rather than so obviously wish fulfillment that it starts to become alienating to your readers. Because honestly? She kind of was.
Merged review:
The premise of this story was great.
Mateo was a lot of fun.
Teague was so nauseatingly perfect it made me want to roll my eyes. I get wanting to have a likable lead, and Teague was likable, but she was also completely flawless. Crazy good at math AND writing AND all sports AND secure enough in herself to take an emotional beating from her boss while working two jobs and being in school AND she’s super in shape despite being crazy busy AND she befriends doormen and nervous brides AND she can do any job you put in front of her AND she’s head-turningly beautiful AND apparently great at sex despite limited experience AND are you starting to see the problem yet?
The worst you can say about her is that she’s a little clumsy when Mateo comes around (though he often bumps into her so even then it’s not entirely her clumsiness), and that’s mostly to facilitate the plot.
I think if you must write a Mary Sue lead, you should at least leave out some of the things she’s great at so that you can still keep her relatable rather than so obviously wish fulfillment that it starts to become alienating to your readers. Because honestly? She kind of was.